A Short Story Shortened


Haiku – Senryu

Mick Talbot
Arthur and the Organ
twas enough my eyes
followed Art his plight grim
mum pleased with her son
dad he was so strict
luckily son understood
dad meant well
prairie sun scorched
34 dusty dry miles there and back
3 months that organ pack
bit by bit all fit
organ assembled ready
music played by mum
short story shortened
an interesting tale told
Christine encore more

All © Mick Talbot 2016/17


2 Comments Add yours

  1. Nice job!
    In the first one you could probably drop that “they” from the second line. Like so:
    twas enough my eyes
    followed Art in his grim plight
    (If truth be told it was probably a bit of an adventure to a 9-year-old out on a prairie homestead. 🙂 )

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    1. Mick Talbot says:

      Hi Christine,
      Many thanks for your appreciation, the advice too. Note I have also removed ‘that’ from the last line in the second one. Another step along my learning curve, yet still a million miles to navigate.


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